1. I think you have a good concept and a good story line. 2. I don't think it makes sense. I get that there is this other world and that he is looking for love? loosing love? I'm just confused on the story and what is going to be happening. 3. I think that if you can figure out how to make the logline make sense it could be an intriguing logline and script.
The logline is surely creative! However I'm not exactly sure where this is going. I think the story may need to mention what is at stake. I'm not too intregued because I don't really understand the plot enough from the logline to be intregued, so it seems sorta lacking.
I think that there is definitly something really great buried inside that log line but i think right now it is a little confusing. Im not sure i fully understand what is happening. Whats the difference between the best friend and the new friend and how do they play a part together? Im perplexed but keep working on it and I think it will turn out great:)
Its a very good concept and can be moulded into something dramitaclly creative. I'm not sure what direction this is going but perhaps that could be a theme, a lot of times love is utter chaos. You could play to that very well!
1. I think you have a good concept and a good story line.
ReplyDelete2. I don't think it makes sense. I get that there is this other world and that he is looking for love? loosing love? I'm just confused on the story and what is going to be happening.
3. I think that if you can figure out how to make the logline make sense it could be an intriguing logline and script.
The logline is surely creative! However I'm not exactly sure where this is going. I think the story may need to mention what is at stake. I'm not too intregued because I don't really understand the plot enough from the logline to be intregued, so it seems sorta lacking.
ReplyDeleteI think that there is definitly something really great buried inside that log line but i think right now it is a little confusing. Im not sure i fully understand what is happening. Whats the difference between the best friend and the new friend and how do they play a part together? Im perplexed but keep working on it and I think it will turn out great:)
ReplyDeleteIts a very good concept and can be moulded into something dramitaclly creative. I'm not sure what direction this is going but perhaps that could be a theme, a lot of times love is utter chaos. You could play to that very well!
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