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The greatest strengths of our scene were the humor added that was consistent with Adventure Time and the characterization that was also very consistent. We did also make that scene our own though, adding in our own twists was very fun and writing then showing the other person and making them laugh was very very entertaining.               

The weaknesses of the scene were probably the differences of viewpoint concerning the show, Jenny and I have different opinions on how the show and all of it’s devices are presented. Given more time it probably would have been more polished.

If I could rewrite my scene I would improve mostly the dialogue.  I know, even though Jenny and I are hardcore fans, that we didn’t get all of the diction perfect for every one of the characters and that would come with more research.. Aka sitting on the couch and watching cartoons for a day or two, Ha. 

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Tyler Wilston                                                                                                                              Creative Writing

Mrs. Basko

Script Reflection

               The script Jenny and I chose to write was two Adventure Time episodes, though originally it was only one but we had to extend it due to finishing the plot of the first episode way before our page count goal. Writing the script was actually very fun, Adventure Time is one of my favorite shows and it was very cool to be in the position of the script writer for it.

The actual sitting down and writing of the script was tough because it is hard to get the thoughts to flow at first and sitting down and writing for a half hour to an hour of my already busy day was strenuous to say the least. Learning how to type and write script was very enjoyable and even fun at times. When we first discussed the project and we were told it had to be a hundred pages my first though was “forget this, this lady is crazy”. After writing it all out though I can see where a hundred pages would be attainable, but not in the timeframe of a month. 

Now after it’s done, I don’t feel like I wasted time with it, though it wasn’t how I would have rather spent that time. I really hardly went through the script frenzy work book, I just did the assignments we were told to do and I honestly don’t even remember them, so nothing was most or least helpful in that workbook, though I did like the packets you gave us earlier in the year. I learned about myself through this project too, I learned that I really don’t mind sitting and tying, when I can get around to it, for an hour or two. Jenny and I tried our hardest and made it past our original goal of fifty pages and made it to sixty eight by the time the deadline came around. I am most proud of the characterization and humor we put in the script because it was kept consistent with the humor of the actual characters of Adventure Time. I think that some of the diction for a few of the characters was off by a little bit and that probably came from the fact that there was two people writing it and we both interpret the show at least slightly differently. I would focus most of my time on my separate writings and my short stories, I feel I could take them a long way and polish them to much greater stories. Thanks for the fun half-year Mrs. B, I really enjoyed it.

Blog #11

Jake: Looking down and KICKING the dirt, with his hands behind his back.
"Lady I love you and I'm sorry I missed our viola practice, I was just out adventuring with Finn and V.U.P, I..."
LADY RAINICORN interrupts
Lady Rainicorn: Speaking rapidly in KOREAN and POINTING an accusing nub/hoof at JAKE.
 "제이크, 그 뱀파이어 유니콘 페가수스 소녀와 항상 아웃, 그녀는 우리 사랑하는 사이에 온다." (Jake, you're always out with that Vampire Unicorn Pegasus girl, she's coming between us darling.)
Jake: With an astonished look on his face.
 "What?!?! No way, V.U.P and I are strictly friends!"
Lady Rainicorn: Narrows her eyes and raises her voice even more.
"아, 그래? 저희 비올라 세션에 나타나지 않았을 때, 당신과 그녀의 다른 하루를 보았다. 실행 및 꽃 마시 멜로를 통해 점프!" (Oh yeah? I saw you and HER the other day, when you didn't show up for our viola session. Running and jumping through the flowering marshmallows!)
Jake:
 "Sweetheart, we were running from a horde of angry goblins!"
Lady Rainicorn: Tears begin forming around her eyes now
"난 신경 안 써, 그것은 기본적으로 같은이야!" (I don't care, it's basically the same thing!)

*She then flies away crying, leaving Jake confused and somewhat upset.*

Blog #10

(The scene that moves the story forward is when Finn observes VUP leaving the Nightosphere and returning to the land of Ooo. Finn sees this event and realizes that VUP is evil, and becomes conflicted and runs to Marceline for help since she knows all about the goings on in the Nightosphere.)

Finn runs to Marceline's house and enters abruptly with sweat running down his worried face.

Finn: Marceline, my life is conflicting on itself! Jake and VUP and the Nightosphere and Lady Rainicorn and!
(he's rambling and Marceline cuts him off)
Marceline: FINN! Calm down, and say it again slower this time.
Finn: (rambling quickly) OK sooooo we met this Vampire Unicorn Pegasus from the Nightosphere but I had no idea she was from the Nightosphere see she only speaks Spanish but Jake and I and her all went adventuring together. And I see now that she was kinda potentially maybe trying to manipulate us. We destroyed evil and she kinda seemed to like the powernessy stuff a little too much. Jake wouldn't believe me if I tried to tell him she was evil cause he knows I think him and Lady Rainicorn should make up!
Marceline: Calm down Finn it's okay I promise, how about you and I make a pro con list? We can figure this all out I promise Finn.

Blog #9

Jake:
"Lady I love you and I'm sorry I missed our viola practice, I was just out adventuring with Finn and V.U.P, I..."
Lady Rainicorn:
 "제이크, 그 뱀파이어 유니콘 페가수스 소녀와 항상 아웃, 그녀는 우리 사랑하는 사이에 온다." (Jake, you're always out with that Vampire Unicorn Pegasus girl, she's coming between us darling.)
Jake: "What?!?! No way, V.U.P and I are strictly friends!"
Lady Rainicorn:
"아, 그래? 저희 비올라 세션에 나타나지 않았을 때, 당신과 그녀의 다른 하루를 보았다. 실행 및 꽃 마시 멜로를 통해 점프!" (Oh yeah? I saw you and HER the other day, when you didn't show up for our viola session. Running and jumping through the flowering marshmallows!)
Jake:
 "Sweetheart, we were running from a horde of angry goblins!"
Lady Rainicorn:
"난 신경 안 써, 그것은 기본적으로 같은이야!" (I don't care, it's basically the same thing!)

*She then flies away crying, leaving Jake confused a somewhat upset.*

Blog 7

Opening Scene

            The episode begins with Finn and Jake walking through the woods in the land of Ooo. Finn asks Jake about the meaning of their lives and the scene snaps to a flashback of the first television episode of Adventure Time where Finn has his bucket list written on his arm, something about slaying goblins and fighting evil. It snaps back to the present where Finn looks like he's just had an out-of-body-experience and Jake makes an intelligent comment, and turns it into a stupid comment as he always does. They see a strange, mysterious being that turns out to be a Vampire-Unicorn-Pegasus. Suddenly there is a zoom in on her heel and she trips over a small pebble in the grass. She trips and falls rolling into the trees. Finn yells "Shmowzow! Jake we gotta help!" Jake: "Eh, I'm fat." Then Finn grabs Jake's arm and they’re off into the forest to get her. The scene will then cut to a view behind them, peaking out of the bushes to see a black Vampire-Unicorn-Pegasus with cuts and scrapes all over it. Jake and Finn look at each other and Jake says in a mind-blown way "Finn that's a V.U.P, there was said to only be one in the world." Upon hearing voices the V.U.P cries out for help in Spanish “AYUDAME!”

The Big Decision

            In the story line the “Big Decision” will be the one made by Jake when it turns four-o’clock (his head rings like an alarm clock changing shape). This interrupts the montage and makes Jake pause to go to the jam session he always has with Lady Rainicorn. However he decides to continue adventuring with Finn and his new buddy VUP not realizing the consequences that may occur in the future for these actions. Meanwhile Lady Rainicorn waits upon the roof in which they always jam on. She realizes after a time lapse that Jake will not be attending and she goes to see Bubblegum Princess.

The “All is Lost Moment”

            Finn knows that VUP is from the Nightosphere, but he doesn’t know what to do about it. He realizes that she is pure evil and toying with Jake. She’s trying to ruin his relationship with Lady Rainicorn. Finn has tried telling Jake but hasn’t been able to because he sees how close he is to VUP. Jake might think Finn is jealous. Finn goes to Marceline and asks her what he should do. She says that it isn’t easy but he has to if he really loves his friend, even if it could hurt him. She told Finn that due to her powerful dad from the Nightosphere (The Lord of Evil) she is capable of sending VUP into the Nightosphere and to not be able to return. Finn and Marceline make a Pro Con list on Marceline’s white board (the white board has I<3LSP on it and a picture of LSP).

blog entry #8

1) Dialog is more movie-dramatic than it is real-life. Playing with how dialog sounds and the characters expressions and who they are.
2) Use supercharged atmosphere to create higher tension in already tense situation.
3) Don't make characters like you, dialog is the way to totally nail character, you need the right words to make the right characters and build their personalities..

#6

            We are making an episode of Adventure Time, therefore all of the characters are pre-established, but they undergo a new adventure to reach Finn’s ultimate goal of being a hero. The episode will begin with the main characters Finn and Jake walking through the woods in the land of Ooo. Finn questions aloud to Jake about what the meaning/purpose of their life is. Finn has a flashback to the first episode when his goals were written on his arm.  Jake makes a startlingly deep comment about the meaning of life and then turns it into something stupid like only Jake can do.  They hear a crash deeper in the woods and run to investigate the sounds of distress.

            To begin their adventure Finn and Jake meet V.U.P (Vampire Unicorn Pegasus) a “dark horse” and foil for Lady Rainicorn.  VUP had tripped over a rock while flying (she’s very clumsy and talks only in Spanish) and run into a tree, bruising her horn. Finn and Jake find her and bring her back to the tree house and nurse her back to health, afterwards the three go out into the land of Ooo to fulfill Finn’s bucket list making Lady Rainicorn jealous (Jakes girlfriend). Princess Bubblegum comforts Lady Rainicorn when Jake doesn’t go to their usual four o’clock jam session.

            A montage of Finn, Jake, and VUP slaying goblin hordes and doing the other things on Finns bucket list. There is an awkward stop in the montage in which LSP (Lumpy Space Princess) interacts with them. Lady Rainicorn finds them off on adventures and gets angry with Jake and flies away.  Jake is faced with an internal conflict of who to be with. He wants to be with his friends, but he already missed the four o’clock jam session. Finn eventually finds out that VUP is from the Nightosphere when he sees her come and go. He realizes she is pure evil, just toying with Jakes heart.

            Finn is conflicted with how he should tell Jake. He tries to tell him multiple times, and he can’t. However when Finn realizes his friend is in danger he gets help from Marceline (who is also from the Nightosphere). He asks her what he should do, and she says they should send her back into the Nightosphere and she has the power to make her stay there, because her father is The Lord of Evil from the Nightosphere.  They walk back to see Jake and VUP who are playing together.

            Marceline sees VUP and falls in love. She instantly claims that she wants her. She runs and jumps onto her back and they gallivant into the abyss. Lady Rainicorn and Jake make up and the four of them have a jam session. The screen goes back to VUP and Marceline still riding off. Everything seems happy ending until VUP disappears into the Nightosphere leaving Marceline behind. It zooms in on her disappointed face and the episode is over. None of the characters particularly changed but life lessons were learned, as well as morals.

#5 reeevision!

The only human in the land of Ooo embarks on a danerous journey to fulfill his bucketlist; will love be lost along the way with the introduction of a new mysterious friend.,

Blog Entry #4 ~ Logline

Jenny Macking and Tyler Wilston

With a new friend on a journey to fulfill the only human’s bucket list in the land of Ooo, will his bestfriend lose his lover along the way?

Blog #2- Writing Exercises: Goals

  The goals I have for this semester are to better my writing and through that, myself. I think that when someone writes they learn more about themselves, if they are being truly expressive in their writing. I plan to work on my short stories more, I haven’t visited them in a while and I want to try to develop some of my short stories into full novels. I love fantasy and writing about fantasy but also making it dark and gripping, drawing the reader in and usually leave them hanging. I love the starter stories from bird by bird and The Pocket Muse they are really inspiring for short story ideas. The Fantasy genre really grabs me too, the dark, horror and grit riddled side to fantasy though. Glenn Cook  is my, sort of role model author. His books and his short stories are all so deep and tug at ones heart strings for all of the tragic characters. There is also no Black and White to the characters, no total hero’s and no absolute villains. “good guys” are sometimes not so good and “bad guys” can be good. Morals are present but not all good morals and not all bad morals. That’s generally how people are. I really hope someday that I will be able to make one of my shorter stories into a novel that would be close to Glenn Cooks caliber of writing. I think the biggest goal I have for this class is my novel writing.

Blog #1-Welcome?

        Hi, my name is Tyler, I made this blog for my creative writing class. I like writing short stories, building suspense and leaving the reader hanging because that always pissed me off about short stories. I also like writing poems and songs but nothing will ever top my love of short stories. I'm good at writing darker grittier short stories that leave the focus on one character or through their eyes and thoughts. I love this class because i'm able to write freely to an extent. My girl friend inspires me to write alot of my poems and songs and the books I read and day dreams i have inspire most of my short stories. My blog is called Tyler's Hazardous mind because Hazard is my screen name when I play games, and yeah I'm sort of a video game nerd. My favorite author is Glen Cook, I can never escape from his books when I start them, the horror-sci-fi genre he writes is so gritty and feels more real than, as another author compared his work to basic fantasy, "much more gripping than a story of a handsome and charming prince whos pants buldge in the front as his line of perfect infantry walks on by after a clever victory." The characters are always flawed to the point of actually being human and it makes them more complex and deep. The Black Company is my favorite book by Glen Cook, it's worth the read and you won't be able to put it down.